Description-outline
Main Idea:
Who? Mike Chu Where? Movie theater When? when I was 18
Body:
Basic background information:
- borned and lives in Taichung
- has parents and an older sister
- now lives with parents
- graduated form Ling-Dong high school and enters Hsiuping institute of Technology this year
- wants to be a computer engineer
- will play basketball, computer and listen music in his spare time
Writer's personal reactions:
- honest and frank
- shy
- childlike smile
- tender man always concerned people - a good listener
Conclusion:
- his happiness will contagious people
- really enjoy the time with him
posted by Kayla @ 10:46 PM
4 Comments:
When? "whin"I was 18. I think "whin" is a slip of the pen, and should be corrected to "when".
Besides, the verbs in the content should be corrected or added "s", such as "have" (parents and an older sister) should change for "has". "want" to be a computer engineer should add "s" so as to become "wants".
Also,will play basketball, "couputer" and listen music in his spare time
I think that is also a slip of the pen and should be corrected to "computer".
ya.. stacy is right.. whin-when
coupter-computer. looks like he is a optimistic person. May be you can talk about why his happiness will contagious people~
I think your outline is OK. But you have to avoid the wrong-typing and grammer mistake.
OK. I like the comments your partners offered. You can go ahead to write your essay. Good luck.
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