peer review of Paul's summary

Read the summary carefully and answer the following questions:
1. What do you like best about your peer’s summary? (Why? How might he or she do more of it?)
I like Paul’s summary which is clear and formal. It is easy to understand.

2. Is it clear what is being summarized? (i.e. Did your peer list the source, and cite it correctly?)
I think it is really clear and he also cites it correctly.

3. Is the thesis of the original essay clear in the summary? (Write out what you think that thesis is.)
Yes, it is clear in the summary. I think that thesis is “A young man had admire a sports car and told his father that he wanted to get one in the graduation day.

4. If you have read the original source, did you identify the same thesis? (If not, how does it differ?)
Yes, I can identify the same thesis.

5. Did your peer miss any key points from his or her summary? (If so, what are they?)
No, I think his summary include whole key points.

6. Did your peer include any of his own opinions in his or her summary? (If so, what are they?)
No, he didn’t add any of his own opinions. He followed the original article.

7. Did your peer include any unimportant details in his or her summary? (If so, what are they?)
No, I don’t think there are any unimportant details in Paul’s summary.

8. Were any points in the summary lost? (If so, where and how might it be fixed? Why do you think it might be important?)
Yes, I think he miss the topic sentence. For his first sentence “A young man had admire a sports car and told his father that he wanted to get one in the graduation day”, I think it is thesis. I think there is a miss before this sentence.

A full box of kisses-summary

A story some time age is about a man punished his three-year-ole daughter for wasting a roll of gold wrapping paper. He was angry when the child wanted to decorate a box under the Christmas tree. However, his daughter gave him a gift with her kisses. At beginning, he was angry because he didn’t fine anything in the box. After realization he was crushed, and begged for her forgiveness. It is said that the man kept the gift by his bed. When he was discouraged, he would take out the gift and remember the love of the child.

The Graduation Present-summary

A young man was getting ready to graduate from college. He told his father he had admired a sport car and knew his father will buy it for him. The young man was looking forward to receive the sport car when the graduation day came. But he was angry after he receives a Bible from his father in his graduation day. He stormed out of the house and wasn’t come back. Many years later, he had a successful business, beautiful home and wonderful family. He started to think about his father and plan to go to him. Before his plan, he received a telegram telling him his father had passed away, and willed his possessions to his son. He discovered the Bible when he back home with sadness and regret. He opened the Bible and read some words and a car key dropped from the back of the Bible. There were the dealer’s name, the date of his graduation and the words “Paid in Full” on the tag.